I am inclined seaward.
Tilted at my desk
with my hair
saltwater soaked.
Seaweed, of course.
There’s a mussel in each ear.
and a starfish sucking on my nose.
Five equal segments hath the starfish.
No heart, nor brain, nor eyes.
And yet I find
its tube feet
with their remarkable vascular system
dragging me off into the deep.
Sliding toward Sandy Hook
Comments
7 responses to “Sliding toward Sandy Hook”
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I think the mussels line is totally, like, get rid of it man. So cutesy. Just cut it out, listen:
Seaweed
of course.
And there’s a starfish
splayed on my nose.
I think “sucking” is cutesy too. Sorry. I’m a little drunk tonight.
Don’t ya love it when some Polack rewrites your poems for ya?
Michael -
Michael: Actually, I do!
Nice to hear from you. This one is still in process. Will work on it more tonight. So who knows, I may yet make your changes and take all the credit…..
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I’ll pay you five dollars to write a song called “Starfish Sucking on My Nose.”
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I thought this one was fantastic. There are so many wordplays going on. I’d keep it as is. I wish I could get out of the confines of prose poems and do this!
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when are we meeting there? good friend
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I am “inclined” to read this whole poem as a remarkable vascular system. Clam-tastic!
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Yeah well I wouldn’t have gone to the trouble of posting anything if I didn’t love it in the first place. Whenever I like something, I get this urge to fiddle with it so that I’ll like it even more. Of course it makes things worse more often than not.
But I still think the mussels are cutesy. So boo.
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